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Jul 15, 2007 7:39:56 GMT -5
Post by EloquentPhoenix on Jul 15, 2007 7:39:56 GMT -5
Enough A/N: A contest entry for The Hideaway. A poem or 200 word drabble beginning with the line ‘It wasn’t much’. Although this piece uses no names it is written as ADMM, though you can think of it as another couple if you prefer. Oh and my apology fluff for this angst will be around soon enough, no doubt.It wasn’t much, but it was enough. They couldn’t fall into each other’s arms today. Just like every other day. He wouldn’t get the chance to hold her if she cried. She wouldn’t be able to come to his rooms to be close to him. He couldn’t watch her as she slept. She couldn’t curl up in his arms. They couldn’t press their lips together and spend all night silently communicating just through closeness. Just like every other day, then. She’d never slept in his arms, and he’d never lain awake all night watching her sleep. He’d never even kissed her lips. They never had, and they never would, they both knew they couldn’t. They had so little to cling to, so little to keep them warm at night. But she had his heart, and he hers. There would never be anyone else for them. All they ever had was their eyes meeting as his lips brushed over her knuckles, each screaming of their love for the other. And as he lowered their hands they would both squeeze a little before pulling their hands away and turning from each other with heavy hearts. It wasn’t much, but it was enough. Finite |
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Jul 17, 2007 13:46:49 GMT -5
Post by beMMADfabulous on Jul 17, 2007 13:46:49 GMT -5
I forgot to review here! I apologize. I love this! It's so sad, but so... plausible.  Great job, my dear.  |
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Jul 17, 2007 16:47:47 GMT -5
Post by Pingpongfreak on Jul 17, 2007 16:47:47 GMT -5
This describes MMAD perfectly. Beautiful. =]
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Jul 18, 2007 1:32:19 GMT -5
Post by EloquentPhoenix on Jul 18, 2007 1:32:19 GMT -5
Thank you both very much  |
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Jul 18, 2007 20:33:57 GMT -5
Post by maritelske on Jul 18, 2007 20:33:57 GMT -5
EP, I thought this was just beautiful. I really like the idea (okay, well - no, I don't like it per se, but never mind) that even if Albus/Minerva being married and having lots of gorgeous children isn't canon, that they really did always love one another - if that makes any sense at all. Although it was short, I thought you captured so much in such few words which is a spectacular gift to have, if you can convey a lot without very much. I really loved the line '... before pulling their hands away and turning from each other with heavy hearts' - it says so much about their relationship. I always enjoy your work, so thank you for posting this |
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Jul 19, 2007 10:53:33 GMT -5
Post by EloquentPhoenix on Jul 19, 2007 10:53:33 GMT -5
*Blushes* Thank you very much for the compliments, I'm glad you liked the story. I don't like the idea myself, I much prefer the fluffy happily-ever-after image. Thank you!
Elo
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Jul 19, 2007 18:57:49 GMT -5
Post by McGonagallsGirl on Jul 19, 2007 18:57:49 GMT -5
Practically Perfect in Every Way.
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Jul 20, 2007 2:59:53 GMT -5
Post by EloquentPhoenix on Jul 20, 2007 2:59:53 GMT -5
Thank you very much. *Blushes some more* |
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Jul 20, 2007 14:01:48 GMT -5
Post by prodigyviolin101 on Jul 20, 2007 14:01:48 GMT -5
For me that would be a tough line to start any written work with, you accomplished it with a unique flare.
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Jul 23, 2007 17:31:02 GMT -5
Post by Blue on Jul 23, 2007 17:31:02 GMT -5
Omg that's so sad, it almost made me cry Very well written though |
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Great job, my dear. 
