A first, last and only kiss

[silvertabby]

Title:A first, last and only kiss
Summary:it happens at the end of HPBP, right before Dumbledore leaves with Harry to get the locket.
Rate:everyone can read
Discleamer:I own nothing
It was sunset, the red rays of the sun were coming in threw the small windows, reflecting in the Griffindor rubbys in the entrence hall.
Professor McGonagall and professor Dumbledore were standing in the middle of the entrence hall, kissing fiercely, oblivious to anything else in the world, a kiss expressing the love and pain of so many years. A first, last and only kiss... before the end. For they both knew...they knew, they both knew where he was going, he was going to death. But he was ready to embrace it with open heart, if only he could kiss her once. Hogwarts would be safe with her, for he had never knew a woman more brave, more clever and more great. She will have to stand, to fulfill his last wish, to protect his school. And she would do it, for a little bit of him would allways remain at Hogwarts, with her. The only thing that can realy make one imortal: the memory.
She saw him go, knowing that she would never see him come back.'You'll be safe in my heart!'

[ιady ταвz]

this was beautiful, had me teary a bit =)

[Leaves of Green]

Aww, so sad! Absolutely stunning!

[MinervaMcGonagall]

Aww. I nearly cried. So sweet, but so sad.

[morgainegaunt]

Hi silvertabby,

I liked the way you express their emotions here (the sunset is a good symbol here, I think).

There are e few things I didn't like, though. I know I'll sound like a real bitch but I'm just telling my thoughs here. Feel free to ignore them.

I didn't like that you switch point-of-views. I think it would have been better to either write your fic from Minerva's or form Albus' point-of-view. And I also think it was a bit too short. If it was a chapter of a bigger fic I'd be okay but otherwise I think about 200 words are much too short even for a shortstory. What you've wirtten is a good start, a really good end or a middle but not a whole story. But that's just me.

I hope you didn't take offence.

[osusprinks]

I really liked this. It was just a short bittersweet moment of a larger story we all know. I liked that. Thanks for sharing!

[TheGryffindorSeeker]

awww that was so sad but sweet. great work

[minerva62]

Well done, but Merlin, sooo sad!!!!!
You made me cry!

[silvertabby]

thanks!