I won't last a day without you

[griseldalafey]

I won’t last a day without you

This poem is inspirited from the song I won’t last a day without you from The Carpenters.
This also is my first poem so please be kind. Let me know what you think.
Written from Minerva’s POV.

Sometimes I want to give up.
Walk away from the war,
But then I know
I will never end up far.

Because there is you,
Always they’re for me
And you always smile
You made it’s all worth while

One look at you
and I know that I could learn to live without any of my friends
In you, I have found the best.

I want you to know how I feel
But the risk that I end up wounded I fair.
And that wound will never heal.

I say nothing but remain to be your colleague and friend.
Maybe some day I will say,
That my love for you will never end.

Please, please let me know if you think it's rubbisch.

[griseldalafey]

OH NO NO NO, this sucks
Forgot to login on my own name Arabella Figgs.
So this poem is from Arabella and not Griselda
Shame on my.
I'm such a idiot.

[ginger newts]

Of course it's not rubbish! It's very good, except I can't stand to see them suffering by not telling each other how they feel. Perhaps a sequel where she talks? Sorry, I know I always beg for that...but it makes me sad. Wonderful poem!

[griseldalafey]

They HAVE to tell each other. They'll just have to. Loved the poem, now I'm off to tell you that you should write a sequel

[QuillofMinerva]

i dont think its rubbish
i agree with the others...there should be a sequel

[jkamd18]

The poem IS NOT rubbish but is sad which i think sets a good mood!!!
keep up the good work though!!