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Post by aphelion on Nov 19, 2006 22:17:03 GMT -5
Okay, I know this is really sappy but it's the first ADMM poem I wrote so it has a special place in my heart. I was imagining Albus by Minerva's hospital bed after she got hurt in OotP... I'm such a sap! Pure mush! Enjoy... Confession If I never told you, Confessed how much I cared, It’s only that I was afraid To lose the life we shared. You’ve been more than a colleague, You’ve been my truest friend And I feared my confession Could be that friendships end. But now I’ll take a moment To let you know the score: I’ve loved you for the longest time And should have thanked you more For all the times you saved me With nothing short of grace And infinite forgiveness For this old man’s mistakes. Behind every great wizard There’s a witch who makes him strong; A woman who can bear him true And tell him when he’s wrong. Believe me when I tell you That you’ve been that to me, Although you’d never own it, My trusted deputy. So now you know my feelings And I’ve just two things to say: You surely are the reason Why I’m standing here today And when this war is over, When all the fighting’s through, There’s nowhere I would rather be Than anywhere with you. Okay that was it, let me know what you think... please? ~Aphelion~
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Post by StormAngel on Nov 24, 2006 4:36:47 GMT -5
nice!!! totally nice!!!!~~
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Post by Ashlynn Minerva Rose on Nov 24, 2006 14:54:17 GMT -5
wow that was really good!!! keep writing poetry you're very good @ it!!!
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Post by aphelion on Dec 1, 2006 17:36:20 GMT -5
Thank you both for the praise! I was afraid that no one was gonna read it. Poetry's never as popular as stories, so it means that much more that you took the time to review.
Cheers!
Aphelion
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phoenixntabby4eva
First-year Student
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Post by phoenixntabby4eva on Dec 16, 2006 2:30:22 GMT -5
Ok took me a while but i'm finally reviewing. i LOVED it. while i was reading it, i was seeing it happen in my head, it was great. AWESOME JOB!!!
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Post by aphelion on Jan 1, 2007 19:30:30 GMT -5
yay! Great! I love it when I make people see things ...but I must NOT use my powers for evil... lol Aphelion
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Post by EloquentPhoenix on Jan 3, 2007 9:13:08 GMT -5
Awwness! See this appeals so much more to my romantic side it's just so 'Aww' and still believable since they aren't together yet.
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Post by aphelion on Jan 4, 2007 22:13:55 GMT -5
It was a more angsty in the first draft. Minerva was unconscious and they weren't sure if she'd pull through and he was afraid that these were things he'd never get to tell her... I'm sure I've got it lying around somewhere if anyone wants to read the alternative version...? I usually hold onto odd bits of paper. Let me know and I'll try to dig it out. [glow=red,2,300]aphelion[/glow]
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Post by EloquentPhoenix on Jan 6, 2007 14:47:29 GMT -5
(I can't believe I'm saying this to an angsty version but) yes I would love to read it
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Post by childminerva on Jan 6, 2007 18:33:47 GMT -5
wow that was beautiful. And being me, of course I want the angsty version as well!
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Post by aphelion on Aug 26, 2007 8:49:21 GMT -5
The angsty version seems to have been swallowed up in the vast piles of paper that is unfinished stories. Seriously, my bedroom looks like the room of requirement. lol. At least I've managed to keep it out of the living room or next thing you know the cat would be lost too... Was just thinking though, this could be a nice little story... people write song-fics all the time, so why not? So who wants to do it? I'm too lazy... aphelion
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Post by Blue on Aug 28, 2007 13:31:31 GMT -5
I loved this, especially the last two lines. I'd love to read the angsty version too. I don't know if I'd be able to write a fic, but if my muse attacks me I'll let you know
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Post by admmityourlove on Oct 6, 2007 12:02:41 GMT -5
Excellent, I can truly picture Albus saying that. *snaps fingers in approval like people do at poetry slams instead of clapping*
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Post by CrankyCauldron on Nov 19, 2007 23:11:09 GMT -5
First poem huh? Gotta love those Hurt!Minerva fics with an attentive Dumbledore at her side.. if only she'd been awake - write a sequel poem!
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Post by micha on Jun 11, 2008 10:48:52 GMT -5
Great, you did wonderful. I like it a lot! To do rhymes - that must be so difficult.
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Post by aphelion on Jun 12, 2008 13:02:06 GMT -5
lol. Rhymes are the easy bit - it's the rythm that's sometimes tricky!
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