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Post by Ashlynn Minerva Rose on Feb 20, 2007 1:34:42 GMT -5
Warning: angst A/N: This is for the 'Whose Line Is It Anyway' challenge at The Hideaway. thaelixir.proboards49.com/index.cgiHer Broken Heart by Minerva Rose
It was only a phantom, the ghost in her dreams; a light shining through the darkest of blacks.
His face glowed like a beacon of hope; a lone star in the night sky. His hand blackened no longer, now a shining silver wisp, reached out for her with want and desire.
His lips the same perfect shape as before forming that smile as bright as the sun. His wardrobe still eccentric with all the purples and reds and the silvery stars dancing on end.
But most importantly are his eyes, with that sparkling glimmer of mischief and intelligence that can match no other. His blue irises brighter then the sky; With a twinkling blink he had my heart in a bind.
But something was wrong with his brilliant eyes. A spark was missing a connection lost, and the last thing she saw was the love dying and gone.
She awoke with a start bolting upright so quick; sweat drenched her body her clothes and the bed. Her surroundings focused her memory came back, and a slow tear trickled down her pale porcelain face. That's how the dream always went, waking with a start, realizing the Phantom was her broken heart.
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Post by childminerva on Feb 20, 2007 11:42:32 GMT -5
"realizing the Phantom was her broken heart"
um, wow. That was amazing and terribly heartwrenching. Beautiful work. Good luck with the contest! -childminerva(mmad)
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Post by mmadlyinlove on Feb 25, 2007 12:57:54 GMT -5
Ooh, so sad. Good job. ~mmadlyinlove~
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Post by Ashlynn Minerva Rose on Feb 25, 2007 21:26:23 GMT -5
Thank you!!! I'm glad you like it!!!
MMAD- thank you && good luck in any contests you entered!!!
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Post by angeldust on Mar 17, 2007 10:27:40 GMT -5
This really hasn't got enough reviews! There is definately a nack to freeverse poetry it either flows or it doesn't this flows perfectly the last two lines were stunning and really tied up the poem well. Fabulous job it was so emotional and well written! Hope you did well on the contest.
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Post by Ashlynn Minerva Rose on Aug 14, 2009 17:33:15 GMT -5
Oh thank you! I just re-read this (I know, conceited much?). I had forgotten about it, and it made me go *tear* HOW DID I PULL OFF THAT MUCH SADNESS!? lol
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Post by gryffindorprincess on Aug 18, 2009 10:25:31 GMT -5
I loved it, and it made be cry.
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Post by Ashlynn Minerva Rose on Aug 18, 2009 12:29:07 GMT -5
Oh, thank you.
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Post by gem on Aug 31, 2009 9:21:10 GMT -5
Your imagery was amazing. This was heartbreaking yet beautiful.
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Post by mistressquill on Sept 15, 2009 23:56:47 GMT -5
OMG I didn't realize you were on the Hideaway . .are you still there?? I'm still there. I'm Mistress Quill there as well. But, anyway I remember this!! Awesome job!!
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Post by horcruxhorror on Oct 22, 2009 16:12:04 GMT -5
that was so gutwrenchingly beautiful and tearjerkingly sad... perfect combination
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