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Post by tabbycat on Jun 14, 2007 19:04:00 GMT -5
note: I've rebelled against the common decency that is rhyme scheme I gave my heart to you, not at your convenience, but at my own. without you nobody knows how I speak or who I am where do you end and I begin? please, do not mention the time, before the stunner's tears, that you shared my bed because I do not know how I love you and I do not know from where. "I love you too," she said, with that ironic smile (where does she get that smile?) before I had the chance. From where does this emotion leave? such heat in such small movements of the clock quickly staring up, need to speak else we all remain. eyes watering and hands parting minds concentrating everywhere else hold her close? I cannot see how, for the rest of my life I would want to do anything else. Speaking of such inconsequent things as dripping inkpots scratching quills chess being played by the fire I want to tell you, tell you everything. pausing as the soil after a rain waiting for vegetation we have that unshielded glance the one that lasts for only a moment so familiar so inconsequent...so usual. "I've missed you, minerva."
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Post by Asphodel on Jun 17, 2007 14:35:17 GMT -5
So, I happen to positively love this, particularly these two verses:
please, do not mention the time, before the stunner's tears, that you shared my bed because I do not know how I love you and I do not know from where.
and
"I love you too," she said, with that ironic smile (where does she get that smile?) before I had the chance.
deliciously well done. Hope to see more, soon!
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Post by tabbycat on Jun 17, 2007 20:40:59 GMT -5
So, I happen to positively love this, particularly these two verses: please, do not mention the time, before the stunner's tears, that you shared my bed because I do not know how I love you and I do not know from where. and "I love you too," she said, with that ironic smile (where does she get that smile?) before I had the chance. deliciously well done. Hope to see more, soon! thank you ;D
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MrCoolio
First-year Student
Yes they are. =)
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Post by MrCoolio on Jun 21, 2007 10:07:26 GMT -5
I love this poem. I could never write poetry, so for those who can you are amazing. My favorite lines too are the
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Post by prodigyviolin101 on Jun 24, 2007 17:34:41 GMT -5
I really enjoyed that too!
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