|
Post by silvertabby on Aug 30, 2007 14:31:46 GMT -5
title:Alone at the end of the world sumarry:Dumbledore is dead. All students are in the great hall. Voldemort is comming. rate: everyone can read disclamer; i own nothing I can't bear it, I can't stand it! He will never smile again, I will never look in his eyes. He's gone and he will never come back. He's dead, the greatest wizard I ever met. He won't be there by my side, he won't lead me threw the dark, he will never be there any more. We will never dance and we will never talk. I walk the corridors he will never walk,where I won't meet him again and he will never come. The classroom where he taught me...the grounds we used to walk...I stand alone, Headmistress of Hogwarts, infront of my students, all crouded, in the great hall, it's the end, they look at me, but what am I to do, I'm only a poor woman as scared as they all are. What am I to do? He's gonne. It's dark in my heart and I'm standing... alone at the end of the world.
|
|
|
Post by silvertabby on Aug 30, 2007 14:36:00 GMT -5
reviews anyone?
|
|
|
Post by MinnieQuill on Aug 31, 2007 4:35:53 GMT -5
Try it with a bit of proof-reading and perhaps people will. As it is, the story is difficult to read. I'm not saying I am perfect at spelling and grammar, I'm far from it, but the simple things make it all so much easier.
Trade 'classwroom' for 'classroom' for instance. 'Gonne' for 'gone.'
|
|
|
Post by McGonagallsGirl on Sept 3, 2007 19:17:33 GMT -5
...lol, what's a classwoom, MinnieQuill? Gahahahaha.
You have great ideas, SliverTabby, but sometimes the simple things like spelling aren't there. It's okay, it's pretty common : ) It happens to me *all the time*
If you need any help with spell-checking or grammar, I'd be happy to read your ficlets before you post them. Just PM me : )
|
|
|
Post by MinnieQuill on Sept 3, 2007 22:37:41 GMT -5
Can we tell that I seriously need to get some sleep?
|
|