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Post by tayryn on Mar 30, 2005 22:17:47 GMT -5
My first challenge response! oooh! *g* short and sweet... (and sorry, ladies... no lemon! this time at least. ) ~o~ “You can’t be serious!?” “I most certainly am.” “But… I… for how long?” “For a few more months… six at least.” “Six!? Are you mad, woman?!” “I will be if I catch you sneaking one.” “But, Minerva… six months without my Sherbet Lemons?!” “It’s your choice, Albus.” “I…” “Is it really that difficult a decision?” “Minerva…” “Albus, really. You know I can’t abide those things at the moment. The smell… the taste…” “Then just don’t eat any.” “I won’t be. And neither will you.” “I don’t see why I have to give them up.” “Because the taste and the smell of them make me nauseous, and I can taste and smell them on you…” “Min…” “Albus, really… the way you’re sighing, you’d think I was asking you to give them up forever.” “But six months… Tabby, it’s going to be an eternity.” “It’s your choice, Albus. Your muggle sweets or me…” “…Minerva…” “Me or your muggle sweets…” “Min…” “My darling… we’ve been through this before…” “I know…” “And you know I will more than make it up to you.” “True… you are getting to that point…” “Where you’re going to be too tired to even worry about your precious Sherbet Lemons.” “Is that a promise?” “You know it is.” “Well… I guess I can give them up for a few months… for a good cause.” “You’re such a good daddy… and just for that… I think I should show you that your sacrifice will not be in vain.” “Merlin, I love it when you’re pregnant!” ~finis
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Post by Jaya on Mar 30, 2005 22:19:31 GMT -5
Wonderful little story! And all in dialogue... I'm impressed! But you could have added just a hint more lemon.... Jaya
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Post by Lady Lavendar on Mar 30, 2005 22:25:36 GMT -5
That was very funny! Poor poor Albus having to give up the sherbert lemons. Well at least he's getting someting better!! LL
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Post by Stephanie on Mar 30, 2005 22:29:34 GMT -5
Great story Mi! Even if I don't read these often, I could so picture it! I just might have to read more of these when you tell me about them! ;D
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Post by Karlynne on Mar 30, 2005 22:39:16 GMT -5
Great dialogue. My imagination took me into lemon territory all on its own so I enjoyed one anyway. Karlie
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Post by QuillofMinerva on Mar 31, 2005 1:37:27 GMT -5
*giggle*
That was fab! It made me laugh and my mind took me into lemon mode after I finished reading lol.
Thank you for responding and I hope you will tackle the challenge tag again in the future.
Clayre x
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Post by Nerweniel on Mar 31, 2005 2:33:05 GMT -5
I was about to feel guilty about asking for a lemony sequel, until I realized that I'm legal since 16 days ;D. So squee... and a wonderful challenge response!
Love,
Lies
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Post by JKMcGonagall on Mar 31, 2005 5:18:48 GMT -5
Someone should remind Albus that when life gives you lemons (or your wife takes them away) make lemonade. Funny story. All dialogue, I am impressed. Thank you for a laugh first thing this morning.
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Post by angeldust on Mar 31, 2005 5:28:08 GMT -5
wow loved the way it was all in dialoge
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Post by Hogwarts Duo on Mar 31, 2005 5:59:34 GMT -5
How cute! And I love how it was if we were eavesdropping on a private conversation...snicker! I bet Albus won't have time to miss those sherbert lemons now!
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Post by ginger newts on Apr 1, 2005 9:04:18 GMT -5
What a cute idea, I never would have thought of that. I'm glad Minerva will be able to make up for the loss of Albus' candy.
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Post by Stoneygem on Apr 1, 2005 16:10:05 GMT -5
oooy...this was really a lovely little piece. Poor Albus, having to give up his precious. Lets hope he survives that...and the activities he got promised in return.
And, well, i am not above begging for a lemony sequel to this...please.... ;D
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Post by Catwoman99 on Apr 2, 2005 12:25:25 GMT -5
Lovely little story. I adored that it was all dialogue. Great response.
- April :-)
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Post by MonFogendau on Apr 2, 2005 16:12:03 GMT -5
[shadow=red,left,300] This is simply lovely! You Rock, tayryn! Hugzz, MonFogendau [/shadow][/size][/i]
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Post by Aurinko on Apr 3, 2005 13:12:45 GMT -5
Very cute. Liked the hint of lemon.
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Post by TheGryffindorSeeker on Apr 3, 2005 16:08:19 GMT -5
Hey lol that was really good. Great responce to the challange
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Post by DumbledoresKitten on Apr 3, 2005 17:49:47 GMT -5
hehe i love this great response to the challenge. but i loved the style, the phrasing, and the closeness you showed between albus and min in such a short story. very cute cat
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