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Post by angeldust on Dec 22, 2005 13:40:41 GMT -5
wowo I like it but I think I may be close to tears that was moving stuff and if I have to wait till summer for the rest I bloody will!
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Post by Isabelle on Dec 22, 2005 19:00:12 GMT -5
I am very interested in seeing how this turns out. I love how you convey Minerva's feelings and emotions and how she is dealing with them.
Ich freue mich auf das naechste Kapitel!
Liz
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Post by QuillofMinerva on Dec 27, 2005 4:24:20 GMT -5
Wow, that was emotional. Would love to see a second chapter  Clayre xx |
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Post by Jessabelle on Dec 27, 2005 12:50:04 GMT -5
That was excellent and a second chapter would be greatly appreciated!
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Post by blackstar on Jan 21, 2006 13:51:10 GMT -5
Hello Great chapter. I’m looking forward to the next update. I can imagine how upset Minerva is. I hope she will be better soon. Well done! blackstar |
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Post by zoeteproet on Jan 21, 2006 16:02:07 GMT -5
I so hope everything will turn out good for Min!
Great chapter, although I hope to read some more soon!
Love,
Sarah xx
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Post by Liz on Feb 2, 2006 17:25:37 GMT -5
Schreib mehr, bitte!! Das war ausgezeichnet!!
Liz
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Post by Jaya too lazy to sign in on Feb 2, 2006 17:28:47 GMT -5
Yes...
No...
and YES!!!!!!
Extremely enjoyable!
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Post by Trulyamused on Feb 2, 2006 18:45:09 GMT -5
Wonderful.
Hope to see more soon.
Truly
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Post by Alesia on Feb 2, 2006 19:26:02 GMT -5
I was just thinking about you today as I was coming home from work. I hope this update means the thesis is moving along well.
I went back and read "Of Things Yet to Come" and both chapters of this together. Your story reminds me of the way you build a complex sauce. You have to start with things to get the flavor and then they may or may not be needed later, but if you don't have them the other pieces won't come together right later.
I agree with Jaya Yes, No, and Yes. I think as you work on it more, you will find small bits you will want to change some.
I had some trouble following what you are trying to say with these lines:
"She wasn’t hungry, she went to bed without dinner, in the jar she labelled ‘decent people’ that Dumbledore thought of ‘the one for me’ which Voldemort called ‘purebloods’ when he had been around."
Is it Minerva who is all of these jars? Or Albus? Or someone else? I wasn't quite sure.
Work on the thesis some more but please continue when you can.
A
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Post by littlemorgsi on Feb 3, 2006 1:43:40 GMT -5
That was pretty good. Except that last bit with the three jars. That confused me. I'm not sure who you were talking about.
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Post by gingerkitten on Feb 3, 2006 11:26:42 GMT -5
PLEASE WRITE MORE!!! We don't usually see Minerva as a widow before her relationship with Albus. Please continue!!!!
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Post by Orion's Guard on Feb 5, 2006 10:32:27 GMT -5
Lol. The jar metaphor is kind of funny.
This is good, and it's more of a chronicle, and I'd like to see what conflict arises because I feel like right now we're just going over a lot of what we know (except for the whole Gilbert thing). Good work and I look forward to seeing more.
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Post by Jessabelle on Feb 5, 2006 15:02:50 GMT -5
I am glad you updated. I quite liked this chapter however I found parts of it a bit confusing. You seem to jump from one thing to the next wuthout always identifying who or what you are talking about. Please update again soon! - Jess |
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Post by blackstar on Feb 15, 2006 12:02:05 GMT -5
Hello Wunderfull update. Pleas write more!! I love your storys. They are really good. |
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Post by Trekkie101 on Feb 24, 2006 7:50:56 GMT -5
I absolutely love this!!! I must admit that when it was made clear that Minerva was married, I was quite upset... (I am a MMAD shipper, duh!) But as I think about it, I rather like the fact that you gave her a life before the books, instead of making her the spinster, old maid like many stories do. I love the whole thing, it's beautifully written and perfectly understandable...
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Post by Isabelle on Mar 15, 2006 17:22:05 GMT -5
I will miss your stories. You have such a wonderful talent. I hope you come back soon.
This was a great chapter. I could feel the emotion dripping from it. There was one part however that seemed a bit awkward and confusing where Minerva is reminiscing about how glad she was that Rita Skeeter wasn't at the funeral. You seemed to move into future tense a bit, like she knew what was going to happen, such as with "It hadn't been long after Albus' death when Minerva learned Harry's chair hadn't been empty..."
Other than that, I liked this very much. I hope you'll return soon!
Liz
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Post by foci too busy to sign in on Mar 15, 2006 17:33:51 GMT -5
Hints at the future and comparisons between past, present and future will be a part of later chapters (some day). Since I plan to end the fic - traditionally - with a wedding, I'll have no chance to elaborate on things that happen after 1983 or so (do not have an exact wedding date yet) and thus plan to use this literary tool. I'll put this thought into a separate paragraph so it can come off clearly that it's the author's voice and not Minerva's.
Thank you for catching this, Liz. Both my beta and I missed this but it really is confusing a bit.
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