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Post by TabbyForever on Sept 9, 2004 17:35:48 GMT -5
OK This is very very new teritory for my!!!
Its my first and somewhat poor attempt at a story...so please be gentle with me!!
Tabs
P.S...it is suppose to be a romnce.
Disclamer...yada yada yada...if they belonged to me i wouldn't be here...i'd be perminantly at the stables!!!
This is deadicated to Nerweniel, Sensiblyquirky and GingerNewts for all the constant persistant pestering i got untill i posted something!!!
Anyway...enough rabbiting on....
The First Time...
Minerva McGonagall was sat alone in her rooms; Albus had been gone too long for her liking. She couldn’t help but feel melancholy whenever he was away but this was almost too much to handle, between the knowledge that You-Kn…Voldemort (She’d have to get used to saying it at some point so why not now!!) was back, and the threat of the dreaded Dolores Umbridge hanging over her…Minerva was feeling positively depressed!!
Consequently as was always the case whenever Albus WAS away, she’d find herself turning to her memories of their life together, along with his nightshirts and socks to get her through those long lonely nights.
The first time ever I saw your face,
I thought the sun rose in your eyes
She closed her eyes and sat there quietly…
She could remember like it was yesterday seeing his face that first time. But then she thought to herself, who wouldn’t!!!
Those sparkling blue orbs…always with a mischievous twinkle in them.
It was true; she HAD thought the sun could rise in them!!!
And the moon and the stars, were the gifts you gave
To the dawn and the endless sky.
Through out the years they’d been together he had given her many gifts, ok so nothing as extravagant as the moon and the stars…but Minerva was sure that given half a chance, if Albus could he would give her them!!
But she was simply contented with the knowledge of his love for her…and of course those every twinkling endless sky blue eyes of his.
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Post by Dewey on Sept 9, 2004 17:40:15 GMT -5
wooooo! that was really good. a lot better than my first story, by far. any more to offer?
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Post by ginger newts on Sept 9, 2004 18:35:01 GMT -5
Yay you posted it! It's very good...I don't know why you were so timid about writing it. Seems like only the beginning. Is there more? I hope...  |
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Post by Sensiblyquirky on Sept 9, 2004 19:39:56 GMT -5
I am very happy, and very proud! I cannot wait to read the rest. ;D  Very, Very nice Christy |
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Post by TabbyForever on Sept 10, 2004 2:02:20 GMT -5
Ok Here's part two...i'm not very happy with this...i think it lacks something but i can't workout what!!!
Oh well enjoy...
The first time...part 2
It was only once they had declared their love for one another that he confessed that he had fallen in love with her, the day she stepped off the school train when she first came to Hogwarts, however it was his sense of what was right, not what he wanted, that prevented him from acting upon his feeling while she was at school.
Minerva herself had also confessed that it was indeed the first time she had ever seen him and those eyes that had caused her to fall so completely and hopelessly in love with him. She however had valued her love of learning too much to risk being thrown out, therefore didn’t say or do anything while she was a pupil.
The first time ever I kissed your mouth,
I felt the earth move in my hands
It filled her heart with joy to think about the first time they had ever kissed. She had still been so young, and Albus her former professor, but he had been such a gentleman. It was after their declaration of love to one another… That first kiss had been, well there was only one way TO describe it!!! Spine tingling, heart melting, and yes, in a word earth moving!!!
True it had been her first kiss and therefore she had nothing to compare it with, but this felt right…in fact nothing in her life had felt more right!
Like the trembling heart, of a captive bird
That was there at my command my love.
Both had experienced that same feeling of heart trembling, and it was like a spark igniting between the two of them, the anticipation as they both moved in after finally admitting what they had been deigning all those years.
And at the time she hadn’t known what to expect, but as he tilted her chin up so as to look her straight in the eye, she knew what was coming, and she knew that she had to keep her eye’s open.
Minerva knew now that she had done this out of fear, that if she didn’t she’d have missed that first sweet kiss…that she’d wake up and discover it had all been a dream!
But they both knew from that moment on, that the memory of that first kiss would be with them forever! At their command, just like that captive bird.
And it was from there that their love had blossomed.
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Post by ArabellaFiggs on Sept 10, 2004 6:34:44 GMT -5
How can you not be happy with it, I loved it. Please continue. Or else................ uhm.................................. I don't now. But continue.  |
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Post by ginger newts on Sept 10, 2004 10:04:21 GMT -5
Oh, this is so good. Stop saying that it isn't, young lady!  *sigh* I'm definitely melting from that description of the first kiss. I never thought I was an emotional romatic nut until I joined this board. Ah, well. *melts* Yay, can't wait for more! Fantabulous first fic. |
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Post by Nerweniel on Sept 10, 2004 10:58:36 GMT -5
JEEEEEEEEM!!! I'M HYSTERICAL! YOUNG LADY, YOU JUST MADE MY DAY! YOU WROTE A STORY! AND IT ROCKS! IT ROCKS IT ROCKS IT ROCKS... *does happy dance*... Um... okay, sorry  . But at least you know now that I personally "quite" liked it . Love, Lies! |
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Post by Sensiblyquirky on Sept 10, 2004 12:27:34 GMT -5
Jemma you're doing a great job! Now no more of this I am not sure if I like it stuff!! That's an order! Can't wait for more, Christy |
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Post by angharad on Sept 10, 2004 12:33:42 GMT -5
The first one's always the hardest. Now you've done it, and a very sweet little story it is! |
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Post by griseldalafey on Sept 10, 2004 12:46:20 GMT -5
It's great, especially for a first fic. (This really was your first fic) A perfect songfic and you're very good with descriptions
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Post by TabbyForever on Sept 10, 2004 17:50:17 GMT -5
OK Peeps, here we are...its the final chapter...!!!hehehehe
Big thanks to everyone's wonderful comments!!!
And to GingerNewts who pursuaded me to post it before i scrapped it and started again!!!!
So with out futher ado...
The First time...part 3
As Minerva started to get ready for bed that night, she put on one of Albus nightshirts, as had been her custom since they had been together and whenever he was away…be it his choice or not!!
As she removed the pins from her hair and brushed it out, she began to think back to their wedding.
She picked up an enchanted picture frame, its contents charmed so that only Albus, herself and their family could see it, and remembered that day like it was yesterday.
From the moment they admitted their feeling to each other, Albus and Minerva had decided to do things properly, with in the week he had asked Min to marry him and she accepted without a moments hesitation, they both knew that this was meant to be, almost as if it had been prophesied that they would meet and fall in love!
And the first time ever I lay with you,
I felt your heart, so close to mine
She remembered that first time so very clearly for he had been so gentle with her, doing things the proper way had included not consummating their relationship until their wedding night, and there was no doubt about it, that first time she had been so nervous!! But Albus ever the gentleman had put her first, and their whole day he had made about her, and so when it came to the wedding night, she already felt like a Queen. And her day got a thousand times better when they left the small gathering arranged to celebrate their marriage. He had paid so much attention to her that first time, (Minerva checked herself…Albus always paid attention to her whenever they made love) she really did feel his heart close to her’s
And I knew our joy would fill the earth,
And last, ‘til the end of time
As she crossed the room to get into bed, a set of long fingered hands covered her eyes…
“ALBUS!!!” she screamed,
“What are you doing here??!! You could get caught!!!” She chided
“Why do think I’m here?” he replied, slowly turning her round and drawing her into one of those spine tingling kisses.
It was true Minerva thought to herself as she regained her composure, their joy really did fill the earth, and would last till the end of time!!!
The first time, ever I saw your face,
Your face,
Your face,
Your face...
As Minerva and Albus settled down to sleep, his arms wrapped around her protectively, Minerva let out a content sigh…
“What is it Tabby?” he asked quietly
“I was just thinking”, she replied.
“What about my love?”
“Just the first time I saw you, and how its lead to a lifetime of firsts” Minerva stated
“Yes my darling, not to mention, seconds and thirds and in some cases even two hundredths!!!” Albus chuckled
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Post by ginger newts on Sept 10, 2004 17:58:00 GMT -5
Oh, so sweet. I'm glad I made you post it as is and not start all over, this was a great ending. *happy sigh* Now that you know you can do it, you better write us more missy! *forgets about writer's block as a goofy smile covers my face* |
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Post by Inappropriate Goat on Sept 10, 2004 18:18:31 GMT -5
This is sweet. I like it. I hate song fics.. even though I wrote one.. oh well you are doing a great job!
MM
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Post by Sensiblyquirky on Sept 10, 2004 22:15:38 GMT -5
That was great! Excellent, sweet first fic! I do hope you will continue to write.
Your american buddy, christy
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Post by Miss Q on Sept 10, 2004 23:51:48 GMT -5
Such aweet, sweet story!!! I hope that you'll have more ideas for stories!
M(issQ)
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Post by Nerweniel on Sept 11, 2004 2:05:38 GMT -5
Jem, you are a good writer, face it . And I'll be bugging you until you write a SECOND fanfic, and a THIRD, and a FOURTH, and a... in one word "mwahahahaha"... Gods I loved this ending. Two-hundredth... hehehe *winkwinkwink* . Love, Lies |
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Post by ArabellaFiggs on Sept 11, 2004 14:47:57 GMT -5
Yah you have finisd it. I loved it. Keep on going.
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Post by Dewey on Sept 11, 2004 19:38:24 GMT -5
;D See? There was no need to fret! It turned out magnificently. (Of course, was there a part that wasn't!) Now, now, ladies, if she chooses to write more, we'll all be behind her 100 percent, and if she doesn't, that's her choice. But. . .
As the Sorting Hat once said "You could be great, you know?"
-Dewey (who's gonna fly the entire cheerleading squad to your home, Jem, if she has to, to give you some inspiration!)
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Post by KayleeTonksLupin on Sept 12, 2004 0:08:21 GMT -5
AW! I LOVE IT! More please? *checks herself as always since her mum decided to be more demanding about begging* Sorry. But I like it! Is it REALLY the end?  it was beautiful! Kaylee Lily Andromeda Tonks-Lupin, who wishes her Mum would stop telling her begging for more story is rude... |
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Post by Catwoman99 on Sept 19, 2004 20:47:24 GMT -5
;D That was absolutely fabulous, Jem! I always knew you could do it. I look forward to more stories from you.
Welcome to the dark side! *evil laugh*
Your buddy,
April :-)
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Post by gingerkitten on Nov 30, 2005 9:14:14 GMT -5
Very sweet.
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. But at least you know now that I personally "quite" liked it 
it was beautiful!
